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Silas Hatcher's avatar

Nice work with the pov. I could never 👍

Liminal Space Creative's avatar

Thanks, I think this is my only 2nd person story. It's not something I'm drawn to.

J. Libeque's avatar

Nice! Always love cave stories even if I never would venture into one by free will. This one reminds me a bit of the old creepypasta ”Ted the caver”.

Great work!

Time Is A Ghost's avatar

Absolute chills reading this! The atmosphere is so thick and oppressive that ending line delivered total goosebumps.

Liminal Space Creative's avatar

Thank-you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

xtrole's avatar

Excellent storytelling! 💯

Very tragic that this search turned into such a terrible situation. 💔

J. Lashley's avatar

Reminds me of some dungeon raids that went exactly like you would expect when the die wouldn't roll your way.

Liminal Space Creative's avatar

Imam cursed by the Lord's of the Die. Doesn't matter what game. D&D, Yahtzee, Risk. Whatever it is I always loose. I regularly would loose a Risk country with 5 soldiers to an invasion force of 2... That game feuls in me a murderous rage to this day 😂

Xapur's avatar

Maybe it wasn't a good idea to ask!

Nice story!

Liminal Space Creative's avatar

Be weary of the question you don't want answered 😱

Rachel Writes Fiction's avatar

Is this for a D&D game?

Liminal Space Creative's avatar

I think his map was. Not my little flash fiction piece that was just for fun.